How I dream of being just whelmed,
I can’t remember how it feels,
I’m marooned inside a realm,
of unachievable ordeals.
There’s no resting place or crutch,
the torment follows me around,
trouble whelms me much too much,
and there’s no solace to be found.
Please God let me be fourteen,
before the whelming was non-stop,
before it got too much to clean
up, with my bucket and my mop.
I like this. personal opinion, I don’t think you need the word ‘up’ or the comma in the last line of the 3rd stanza … again just personal opinion.
Either way – this was a relate-able read. Thanks.
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Thanks a lot Marcus. Yeah I ghear you. I can totally see that. It’s just how it came out at the time – a bit of cheeky enjambment. I appreciate the feedback – thank you.
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I think I’m on Whelm-Ultra at the moment.
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I know where you’re coming from. That was me today. Hence the poem. Sometimes you need to run away but there’s no place to run. So you just stand and quietly go out of your mind.
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